✔ Vaginal Rejuvenation
Completed by Hector M.
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Melissa Z.
Vania J.
- Notes
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Hi
Melissa
Here's another page we need content for - Vaginal Rejuvenation
Thanks,
Thank youuuu!
Thank you so much. You're a good writer and I really appreciate your help. You also have a good understanding of the treatments, which is a big advantage. The only area that I would recommend working on is dumbing down your writing. This page garners a 12.5 grade reading level. We are shooting for 8. This is my biggest challenge too. Omit unnecessary words, using smaller words if interchangeable with bigger words, and keep sentences as short as possible.
Also, chronology. Try to write about things in the order they happen or in the order you would teach someone if they were learning about something for the first time. This is actually much harder than it sounds and is also something I am working on. Writing out an outline really helps me in this area.
For me personally, focusing on these two areas have really helped me write better.
Please read over the comments and adjustments. Add a before and after paragraph. And we should be good to go. Again, thank you so much.
Thank you Vania.
I will proofread it and then upload it again for J. to post.